Here's a poem I recently wrote, i don't write as often as I used to, just because I have to get really fucking emotional to write anything good, but yeah here's one I wrote this morning:

Dad:
Oh such a bore
Oh such a drag
That fucked up Friday night
Was the best I've ever had
...I fucking hate you Dad,
I fucking hate you Dad
What else can you do to me
That's not already been done
Ruin my whole life
And away from you is where I'll run
I've got it all planned out
And I know where I can go
You'll want me to come back
But in the end I'll just say no
So when you're feeling lonely
And you don't have a son anymore
Just you remember,
It was you that showed me that door
It was you that cut open my skin
It was you that made me bleed
You are the one whom I hate the most
And the one that I least need.

When you told me, "I don't believe you"
My heart, it shattered and fell
That moment you had killed me
But for some reason, you couldn't tell
Whether it's because you just don't care
Of perhaps you just couldn't see
Don't think that I'll be bothered anymore
I won't let you bother me
I don't believe in you I'll say
You're the Father I never had
Some day you'll tell me you're so sorry
But I Fucking Hate You Dad !


You can check out myother poetry and if anyone gave comments it would be great ! Just click on my lil www button under my avatar

hmmm... im really self conscious of my poetry- if you can call it that...
i will post it anyway- if you promise you wont laugh!
your poem seems really deep- you must have some REALLY strong feelings towards your dad. i feel alot like that towards my mum but maybe not so strongly.

here it is:

words are indescribable, it would just take too long,
am i capable of not being wrong?
'who is she?' 'i thought she had part'
it digs into me like a dagger to the heart
would it be lucrative for me to just leave,
to dissolve into nothing what would i achieve?
this makes me think what would i mislay?
what would they do? what would they say?
to slip between the floorboards,
to be associated with another
to posses a non existant identity
to hide between the cover
is this all worth my existence?
am i the victim here?
these elusive characters, do they yearn for my fear?
i hide behind this layer of hair to notify the Superior
i will lead them to a life, fit for the inferior.


when i say behind this layer of hair- i dont mean 'emo' its like symbolism, like hiding the true you.

Bloody hell stumbeleine!

I only read the first 2 lines and I thought, wow this is gonna be good! That's a really good poem, I think it is definately worthy of being called poetry Nice one !

wow. both of your poems were amazing.

Thanks

Here's one I wrote about bullying a while back, it's one of my favourites:

It hurts
It hurts
It hurts
It hurts
The gentlest punch
The smallest kick
The quietest comment
It just makes me sick
It all adds up
And it all brings pain
Every little thing
Turning me insane
The biggest slap
The hardest push
Ive had it all
Making my blood rush
You stand there and tell me
Its just a bit of fun
Well look inside me
Look what you've done
Im covered in scars
And theyl never go
You've hurt me more
Than you'll ever know
I feel like shit
And its all because of you
All because of you
And those little things you do
You make me want to harm myself
You make me want to die
How can you say it was all a laugh
Look me in the eye
Your bullying hurts
Its put a stop to my life
Have you ever felt so bad
You threaten yourself with a knife
I doubt that you know
Exactly what youve done
Your to stupid to know
Remember its just fun
But it hurts
It hurts
It hurts
It hurts.

By Richard Longstaff

Everybody's talented
Except me

If nothign else (which I'm sure you will be) you're talented at choosing avatars and forums to join

Your name isnt felix? l. ol

that was really good. I have never had much of a bullying problem in my school. im not really a target i guess.....

Felix link=topic=462.msg6175#msg6175 date=1158232039]
Bloody hell stumbeleine!

I only read the first 2 lines and I thought, wow this is gonna be good! That's a really good poem, I think it is definately worthy of being called poetry Nice one !

wow thankyou! im really suprised that you liked it!
i really like your second one aswell, i reckon YOUR really talented. it seems people that have been through alot make great songs and poems.

stumbleine link=topic=462.msg6210#msg6210 date=1158265734]
Felix link=topic=462.msg6175#msg6175 date=1158232039]
Bloody hell stumbeleine!

I only read the first 2 lines and I thought, wow this is gonna be good! That's a really good poem, I think it is definately worthy of being called poetry Nice one !

wow thankyou! im really suprised that you liked it!
i really like your second one aswell, i reckon YOUR really talented. it seems people that have been through alot make great songs and poems.


Yea, stumbleine, yours was ridiculously ridiculously good [looking] ! zoolander........ahhh

Yerp, anger drives my poetry really.

I wish my name was Felix !

For a moment I forgot who I was,
Only a few seconds away from amnesia,
But to the point it was somewhat startling.
And you know exactly what I mean,
To lose all love for routine,
And love the free-handed life,
Like the world's supposed to be.
And that's why I want to go back to where you stand,
To watch you free-hand words like a river
With no definite direction,
Like a frozen lake that cracks multiple time,
A tidal wave of hesitation but willing to plunge head first,
But still be in the safety of your arms,
Willing to let go of worry and trudge forward into something uncertain,
Like the knot in my stomach that pulses as if it has a heart,
Pulling tighter when you look at me,
And when I look at you.
Soon forgetting ourselves once again.

lol, i was just think of a thread like this, i was in gym class and tried to write a song, but ended up with little poems, heres one

other people frown upon
this friend that never let me down
in my little town
this day has got me down

*its about cigarettes*

Felix link=topic=462.msg6224#msg6224 date=1158268515]
Yerp, anger drives my poetry really.

I wish my name was Felix !


l.o.l. My family has this thing about giving everyone alternate names and mine was Felicia, the female version of Felix!

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Felix link=topic=462.msg6224#msg6224 date=1158268515]
Yerp, anger drives my poetry really.

I wish my name was Felix !


l.o.l. My family has this thing about giving everyone alternate names and mine was Felicia, the female version of Felix!


hehehe, thats pretty funny, people i know, just add "ina" at the end of boys names to make fun

hehe
i get a break from this race
to see my only friend
arising from his case
he puts a smile on my face

*lol, its so kindergarden - but again, about cigarettes*